You’re at a nightclub. Girl 1: You spot girl one dancing on a table in a mini skirt and you see her laced thong. She’s already drunk and made out with the guy at the bar. She’s loud and dancing like a stripper using the bar stool as her pole. (She isn’t leaving with the [...]

It don’t have a clear idea of where I’m going with this I just know its going to be a romance. Here’s part of the first chapter of my story. I need an opinion? I feel as if its too detailed. I’m 14 (almost 15) BTW. It was a windy and gloomy Saturday afternoon. I [...]