It don’t have a clear idea of where I’m going with this I just know its going to be a romance. Here’s part of the first chapter of my story. I need an opinion? I feel as if its too detailed. I’m 14 (almost 15) BTW.

It was a windy and gloomy Saturday afternoon. I was caught inside wiping down the unused counters. It was such a monotonous job, but it paid well enough for me to save up for a used car sold downtown. Crumbs and specs of food clung onto the surface of the tables. It was disgusting since I detested cleaning up food, actually, I despised cleaning in general.

I switched to the next table as I heard the store’s wind chimes jangle. I turned around to see our new customer. It was a young boy around my age, possibly one or two years older. My eyes examined him, starting from the bottom up. He had black and white checkered slip-on shoes and a pair of navy blue skinny jeans on. He also wore a large, dark grey and neon yellow sweater with a plaid design. The man was dressed in a plain black t-shirt with possibly a design in the top center. I couldn’t see since his sweater was zipped up more than half-way. He had a heart-shaped face, shapely lips, a normal-sized nose, and deep blue, far-seeing eyes that I found hard not to stare into, although, it was hard considering his chocolate-colored covered hair was mostly covering his eyes in a left, side bang direction.

The moment I snapped back to reality I gave off a fake smile and walked over to greet him,

“Hello, I am Kaori. May I direct you to a table, sir?” He just walked pass me and approached the bar where he planted himself on a stool. I thought to myself,

“That was pretty rude of him.” I decided to avoid him for his time being here.

**Sorry if the spelling, pucntion, grammar sucked. Sorry abou the spacing,
his chocolate-colored covered hair

**remove covered!!
oh and its past not pass.


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